Slice of Life 19/31

A confused expression is all I wear,

as I hold my neck from the constant spinning.

You change from day to day,

probably forgetting what you say.

This new you is getting old.

Why did the old you have to go?

We used to have so much fun,

playing and laughing in the summer sun.

Maybe one day we’ll meet again.

I’ll be waiting, see you then.

2 thoughts on “Slice of Life 19/31

  1. Wow. I really, really like this poem, Rachel! Is it a new one just for the challenge, or one you’ve been working on?

    It totally captures middle school and friendship for me. Perhaps my favorite thing about it, is that the second line doesn’t rhyme with “wear” – doesn’t complete the couplet (2 rhyming lines). I like that because it how you feel when you’re spinning – like you’re unmatched. And the fact that there are two lines to a couplet makes me think of 2 friends – who are apart, but used to be together! Ooh, I think I have goosebumps! 🙂

  2. Thanks, I’m really happy to hear that you liked it! When I try to quick write a slice at 10:00 at night a poem is what comes out. Do you think this would be a good poem to enter into a poetry contest that I heard about?

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